Stone Walls

Day by day

You chip away

Chip by chip

You remove each brick

Brick by brick

You demolish the walls

My walls

You broke in

But you won’t

Break me ©

5 thoughts on “Stone Walls”

A real sense of determination and of giving the illness the fingers here, Rach!
A wee suggestion, how does ‘broke through’ sound for the walls?

Best regards
marion

projectwords11 says:

09/08/2012 at 9:29 am

Thanks for the suggestion Marion, I used ‘broke in’ because of the sense of invasion/unlawful entry, invaded by lupus

Rach

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1. seaviewwarrenpoint says:
  
  09/08/2012 at 10:35 am
  
  Yes, I thought that was why – it was just that walls being ‘broke in’ just sounded unnatural to my ear, as I would normally expect ‘break down’ or ‘break into’, but you are right to keep it for that sense the invasion. Great poem!
  
  marion
  
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